Categories
Writing

Still Learning

I never thought about rhythm in my writing. Not once.

A lifetime of writing. More essays than I can count. One book. And the sonic quality of my sentences โ€” the way they moved, or failed to move, through a readerโ€™s mind โ€” simply wasnโ€™t something I considered. I was too busy trying to say something true. I thought that was enough.

What changed was reading differently. Not for pleasure anymore, or not only for pleasure. David Perell conducts long interviews with writers about how they actually work โ€” not what they believe about writing, but what they do, physically, at the desk, in the dark, before anyone sees it. He asks the same structural questions of very different writers and the patterns emerge slowly, the way patterns always emerge: first you see it once and think nothing of it, then you see it again, then you canโ€™t stop seeing it. Rhythm came up constantly. Always in different language. Pacing. Breath. Music. Momentum. Always pointing at the same thing.

Then I found this from Susan Orlean:

My new preoccupation was on the sonic quality of my writing โ€” the rhythm and tone of the sentences. I began reading all my work out loud, listening for places that lagged and dragged, that didnโ€™t sparkle. I knew it was unlikely that anyone else was reading my stories out loud, but I was convinced that you do โ€œhearโ€ writing in your head as you read, and this pushes you (or stalls you) through the piece. I wanted the music โ€” that is, this subconscious tonal effect โ€” to match the subject.

I stopped. Read it again.

Because she was describing something real โ€” something I had been doing wrong for twenty-five years without knowing it was wrong. You donโ€™t know what you canโ€™t hear. Thatโ€™s the whole problem. The silence where the knowledge should be is itself silent.

I donโ€™t read my work out loud. Thereโ€™s something strange about it, something that breaks the spell โ€” you stop being a writer and become an actor, hearing your own sentences hanging in the air, too exposed. But I do read and read again, more carefully now, looking for the wobble. Orleanโ€™s point holds regardless of method: you hear writing in your head as you read it, and that hearing either carries you forward or it doesnโ€™t. The ear that matters is the one inside.

George Saunders has a practice he describes in A Swim in a Pond in the Rain: he reads from the beginning of a piece over and over, and the moment something feels off โ€” a word, a rhythm, a single syllable landing wrong โ€” he stops and fixes it before moving forward. Never skips the trouble spot. Never tells himself heโ€™ll come back. His opening pages accumulate dozens of passes before he ever reaches the end. What heโ€™s really doing, underneath the technique, is training himself to feel the exact microsecond when a readerโ€™s attention would start to drift. To catch the loss before it happens.

Thatโ€™s not craft instruction. Thatโ€™s building a new sensitivity where there wasnโ€™t one before.

John McPhee works from the other direction entirely. His famous boxes โ€” index cards, sorted into piles, piles arranged into sequences, nothing drafted until the structure is known โ€” are about architecture before a single word is written. Heโ€™s deciding which rooms exist, and in what order, before he furnishes any of them. Where Saunders builds outward from one true sentence, McPhee builds downward from a blueprint.

But theyโ€™re asking the same question. McPhee: is this section in the right place? Saunders: is this word in the right place? Both listening for the moment the piece loses its hold on the reader. Both doing triage on something most writers never even examine.

What Iโ€™m still learning โ€” slowly, and late โ€” is that rhythm isnโ€™t decoration. It isnโ€™t the thing you tend to after the real work is done. Itโ€™s structural. A sentence moving at the wrong speed for what itโ€™s carrying fails the thought itself, not just the ear.

Thereโ€™s something else Iโ€™ve been thinking about. If rhythm is the thing thatโ€™s hardest to hear in your own work โ€” if the ear takes years to develop โ€” then maybe the most useful writing tool isnโ€™t a grammar checker. Those are solved. What isnโ€™t solved is the rhythm problem. An editor who listens for the wobble, explains whatโ€™s failing and why, and works through the fix with you rather than just patching it. Not a red pen. A teacher.

Iโ€™ve been experimenting with exactly that. An AI editor I call Clark. His job isnโ€™t correctness. Itโ€™s the sonic quality of prose โ€” the rhythm โ€” the same thing Orlean was describing, the same sensitivity Saunders spent years training. Clark finds whatโ€™s working as hard as what isnโ€™t. And when something fails, he explains what the readerโ€™s inner ear is hitting and why. Helpful.

I didnโ€™t know much about rhythm in writing when I was fifty. Didnโ€™t know it at sixty.

Iโ€™m not entirely sure I know it now. But I know it more than I did, which might be the only kind of knowing thatโ€™s real.

A lifetime of writing. Still learning how to listen.

Categories
Books Writing

The Secret Handshake

Author George Saunders has a gift for articulating things you already knew but couldnโ€™t say.

I was reminded of this recently when I returned to A Swim in a Pond in the Rain, his generous, luminous masterclass on Russian short fiction โ€” the book that uses Chekhov, Turgenev, Tolstoy, and Gogol as a lens for understanding what fiction actually does to a reader, and why.

Early on, Saunders wonders whether there might be certain laws governing how we respond to stories โ€” not rules handed down by writing programs, but something closer to instinct, something wired into the reading mind.

One of his candidates is physical description. โ€œWe like hearing our world described,โ€ he writes. โ€œAnd we like hearing it described specifically.โ€

That line stopped me. It has the quality of a truth that, once named, you begin seeing everywhere โ€” in the books you love, in the passages youโ€™ve underlined without quite knowing why, in the sentences that have stayed with you for years long after the plot has faded.

Plot pulls us forward. Character keeps us invested. Ideas give us something to argue with on the drive home. But itโ€™s the specific physicality of a story that makes it land in the body.

โ€œIt was rainingโ€ barely registers. Tell me instead about raindrops beading on a leaf, or the way mud sucks at a boot heel with a wet shlup, and suddenly Iโ€™m not reading about a place โ€” Iโ€™m standing in it.

Why should this be?

Saunders doesnโ€™t fully explain it, and maybe the honest answer is that no one fully can.

Our brains are pattern-matching machines, wired by evolution to map territory and imagine consequence โ€” and concrete detail feeds that machinery directly. Or maybe the explanation is simpler and more generous: we love the world, and hearing it rendered with precision is a form of praise.

Whatever the reason, the great writers have always known this law and obeyed it joyfully. With the help of AI Iโ€™ve collected a few good examples.

Consider the opening of Hemingwayโ€™s A Farewell to Arms:

In the bed of the river there were pebbles and boulders, dry and white in the sun, and the water was clear and swiftly moving and blue in the channels. Troops went by the house and down the road and the dust they raised powdered the leaves of the trees.

No grand metaphors. Just pebbles, dust, leaves, color, motion. Yet the scene is so tangible you can almost taste the grit. And the specificity does double duty โ€” it grounds us in a real place while quietly foreshadowing the war that will eventually powder everything.

Dickens, who worked at a different scale entirely, goes symphonic with it. The opening of Bleak House is one of the great set pieces in the language:

Fog everywhere. Fog up the river, where it flows among green aits and meadows; fog down the river, where it rolls defiled among the tiers of shipping and the waterside pollutions of a great (and dirty) cityโ€ฆ Fog creeping into the cabooses of collier-brigs; fog lying out on the yards and hovering in the rigging of great shipsโ€ฆ fog cruelly pinching the toes and fingers of his shivering little โ€™prentice boy on deck.

The repetition is hypnotic, but itโ€™s the specificity โ€” cabooses, rigging, toes, pipes โ€” that transforms weather into a living, malevolent presence. You donโ€™t just read the fog. You feel it in your lungs.

Fitzgerald does something different again in The Great Gatsby, using the same technique to make moral decay feel physical and inescapable:

This is a valley of ashes โ€” a fantastic farm where ashes grow like wheat into ridges and hills and grotesque gardens; where ashes take the forms of houses and chimneys and rising smoke and, finally, with a transcendent effort, of men who move dimly and already crumbling through the powdery air.

Ashes donโ€™t just lie there โ€” they grow, they form, they crumble. The grotesque precision turns an industrial wasteland into an image of everything the Jazz Age is trying not to look at.

And then there is Chekhov, who Saunders loves most of all. In โ€œGooseberriesโ€ โ€” the story that gives Saunders his title โ€” Ivan Ivanych plunges into a river in the rain:

He plunged into the water with a splash and swam in the rain, thrusting his arms out wide; he raised waves on which white lilies swayed.

Those white lilies swaying on the disturbed water โ€” two words, one image โ€” capture pure animal joy more vividly than any abstract declaration of happiness ever could. Itโ€™s the kind of detail that makes you want to jump in yourself.

Saunders is right.

Our reading minds light up at this stuff. Specific physical description isnโ€™t decoration or craft-workshop virtue signaling โ€” itโ€™s the secret handshake between writer and reader. It says: I noticed this small, real thing. Did you?

In a world increasingly mediated by screens and summaries and the frictionless delivery of abstracted information, fictionโ€™s quiet insistence on the pebbles and the fog and the lilies feels almost like an act of resistance. It insists that the world is worth looking at. That the particular matters. That rendering one thing exactly right is worth more than gesturing vaguely at everything.

So next time youโ€™re reading โ€” or writing โ€” linger on the details. Describe the world specifically. Our hungry minds will thank you for it.


Questions to Consider

  1. Saunders suggests physical specificity might be a kind of law in fiction โ€” something the reading mind responds to almost instinctively. Do you think this is universal, or culturally conditioned?
  2. The examples here are all from the Western literary canon. Does this law hold in traditions โ€” Japanese, Russian, African, South Asian โ€” that handle interiority and landscape differently?
  3. If our appetite for specific physical detail is partly evolutionary โ€” the brain mapping territory โ€” what does it mean that so much of what we now consume is deliberately abstract and summarized?
  4. Can over-specificity fail? Are there writers who pile on detail to the point where it stops doing its work?
  5. Saunders uses fiction to make the point, but does the same law apply to nonfiction, memoir, or long-form journalism โ€” and if so, who are the writers doing it best right now?
Categories
Books Living Musings

Turning Off the Braindead Megaphone

Photo by Zach Vessels on Unsplash

Way back in 2007, author George Saunders published his first book of essays with the curious title of The Braindead Megaphone. In the title essay, he describes going to a very enjoyable party where the guests are all having a great time – until another guy shows up with a megaphone in his hands and starts talking about random stuff – like how the flowers bloom in early springtime and more. The megaphone guy’s stupid voice drowns out the many otherwise enjoyable conversations being had among the guests.

I read that essay for the first time a few weeks ago – and found it to be a beautiful reminder of the influence that loud voices can have on us and on how we feel. For me, TV news has become that megaphone guy ruining the party. Who needs that?

In his latest book, A Swim in a Pond in the Rain, Saunders writes about how a writer can be likened to a music producer sitting in front of one of those big mixing boards connected to many different microphones picking up the sounds of the many instruments and voices. The mixing board has rows of fader switches to adjust the sound coming from those many different sources – the music producer uses those faders to “mix” those sounds into the final production.

Photo by Drew Patrick Miller on Unsplash

Saunders writes that “a story can be thought of as a version of that mixing board, only with thousands of fader switches on itโ€”thousands of decision points.” The author’s role is to adjust the levels of those faders to create the best story. Doing so, Saunders counsels, involves a repetitive revision process โ€“ “going through a story again and again, microtuning the adjustment of the existing fader switchesโ€ฆ” to make the story the best it can be.

Saunders’ mixing board is a metaphor for life โ€“ for how we go through our days, constantly adjusting up or down the many inputs that make up our daily experiences. Choosing to play a video game involves cranking up that fader switch while turning down other activities competing for our time. Taking a photowalk to help refocus and experience the world differently is another mixing board adjustment. So many other inputs are part of that big mixing board of our life.

Each day our mixing board gets tweaked – hopefully producing pleasing “music” that’s delightful to us. But some days there may be a cacophony of sounds (experiences) instead – with our mixing board somehow mis-adjusted and out of whack. Thatโ€™s when it’s time to step back and re-examine our inputs and re-adjust them โ€“ or to find new ones to add to our mix or to eliminate others.

About a year ago I made a choice for my life mixing board – choosing to eliminate the input of television news. I turned the volume completely down on my mental mixing board, choosing to eliminate that input from my life. My choice to do so resulted mostly from my frustrations with the events occurring in our country during that time – events that I couldn’t influence and which I didn’t need to have repeated over and over again. So I flipped that switch and the TV news was gone.

One other thought. Many years ago I remember the book titled Steps to an Ecology of Mind by Gregory Bateson. While the content of the book was a bit over my head, that title has always stuck with me. What are the steps that might lead to an improved ecology of my mind? A year ago eliminating television news as a regular input in my life was one of those steps. One that has worked out very well for me.